Lesson Learned

I have to work to write fewer sentences that start with pronouns. (He, She, I,). Too many of these together make everything seem like a list. I should use discriptions between these sentences to give them life and meaning. But too much discription will make things seem fluffy. Like Goldielocks, the trick is finding the "just right" combination. When I am writing I am too focused on capturing the action and not enough on the prose that will capture the reader.

At least I am beginning to see some of my problems. I haven't completely fixed them, but it helps to know what to look for.